Structure

August 4, 2005, 4:37 am

Structurefleshy senses, minded movementswe are communal elementspassed for ages by survivinggenes for leading and obeyingprovoke a thirst in us for structureincidental to our naturea pecking order...

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My own thought is that this particular poem says that our need for structure/power/order is unnatural--esp. as one considers all matter's need for entropy - So why not keep the idea of "man's need for...

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Re: Structure

August 4, 2005, 6:59 am

Thanks for those thoughts Ryan, much appreciated. The lines/breaks are very constrained, actually the result of a lot of playing around. That is a structure I find hard to break out of.I don't think...

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Re: Structure

August 4, 2005, 7:50 am

This is almost an oxymoron in that it is an unstructered poem with the title "Structure."What do you have against the symbols of grammar that are like road signs to the readers traveling down your...

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Re: Structure

August 4, 2005, 11:05 am

Hi Joshua,I'm very tempted to suggest you break this poem right out of any structure and use the lack of it to reinforce the point you're making.Don't mind me though, I've been studying avant garde...

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Re: Structure

August 4, 2005, 4:46 pm

Thanks for stopping by John.I agree with your crits in general. I am not sure exactly why I wrote without capitals and with minimal punctuation. I think it stemmed from trying to cut as much filler as...

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Re: Structure

August 4, 2005, 5:04 pm

Thanks for the detailed crit girl, you make a lot of good observations.I did try to structure and balance the presentation of the ideas, nothing else. I guess such a title begs examination of the...

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